Wikipedia:Peer review/Fuel Cell Bus Club/archive1

Fuel Cell Bus Club

I think I am the only person to have contributed to this article so far. I know it needs to have a reference to the United Nations and perhaps when the buses started operating in Europe if we can find that out. Brianjd 05:55, 2004 Nov 30 (UTC)

• Another user has also contributed. Brianjd 07:36, 2004 Dec 4 (UTC)

I think the article looks fine and I can't think of anything to add or remove. Good job. Very interesting topic too. MikeCapone 19:34, 12 Dec 2004 (UTC)

• This article covers trials other than the one being conducted by this club, which is inappropriate, but I can't think what should be done about it. See Talk:Fuel Cell Bus Club#Other trials. Brianjd 10:06, 2004 Dec 24 (UTC)

• Nice work :-) However, I have suggestions:
  • The lead section needs to explain what CUTE, ECTOS and STEP are. I realise that this is explained later in the article, but the point is that the lead section introduces the article to the reader. It makes the reader aware of what the story is about and doesn't assume any knowledge, and doesn't assume they will read further to find out what acroyms are, or what the organisations do.
  • Further, the lead section needs to explain why the reader should care about the story. Maybe a brief one-two sentence explanation of the importance of the project? I still don't know why it is important from the project, though I know I can click on fuel cell... however most readers won't do that, especially if Wikipedia is sluggish. Never assume the reader knows anything... or if you have to spell out the facts at the start and get progressively more detailed and obscure as you go.
  • There are too many levels. I would suggest removing the "Project" level and the "Fuel Cell Bus Club" level and just have the CUTE, ECTOS and STEP levels. I'd then incorporate the info that all the information is shared by the projects into the lead section.
  • Expansion: is there more information available we can add to this article?
  • References: we need to get this section fixed up. See Wikipedia:Cite sources for the correct format for references.